The stuff with the bubbles worked out nicely. Digging the weight and flow of the handshake panels, too.
Looks like things are ramping up, too. THE SUSPENSE.
The creepiest thing about Charlie is his red flesh tones outlined in blue. It makes him really visually unsettling. Good move. (I’m so glad we can just call him Charlie, now.)
Also, this is a totally vapid thing to say but the Diver’s beginning to strike me as a bit of a hottie. I’m mentioning this only because it rarely occurs to me re: comic characters. Usually they don’t look this much like adult human males.
I just LIKE Charlie, but I don’t know why. He seems friendly and… and sane! Yes. Maybe not totally sane, but at least 80% sane.
Also when I first started reading, I was kinda worried it would just be confusing event after confusing event. Like a dream, y’know. “Last night I dreamed I saw a unicorn, but then it turned into an enormous tortoise that broke apart my house with its mind! Then I met a random fellow and he told me not to eat the watermelons, etc.” But that last line, “Suddenly, the man’s words made sense.” has me full of hope for the future! Woot! \o/
That’s good to hear! I was worried that people would be mad about how much mystery I killed with a single page!
The body language is so good damned good. Even if Charlie’s dialogue was still unreadable I’d still have an awesome sense of what is going on. Especially the Diver in panel two.
And ditto on the colors, so eerie in the best way.
Ohhhhh. This IS going somewhere. XD
finally, i know right?
flag shanged again, i really want it to spell out a message
well well. The flag that is blue, white, and red is codenamed charlie in signal flags. Charlie’s color scheme is that of the flag. Now we have a new icon, the flag for B, or bravo.
what’s your game?
agh double post, sorry
Heh more chest hair! >8D
There are two things that I particularly enjoy about Alpha Flag so far, and they are (in no particular order) the heavy non-verbal communication. Everything is so well put together that, even without any dialogue up until this point, you have been able to, in some way, identify with the protagonist.
And the faces. The facial expressions, yes, but especially the faces.
Thank you very much for this. I really am enjoying so much about it.
Thanks Drew! I’ve been working on those particular things pretty heavily for the last couple of months, so I’m glad to hear it’s paying off.
The Diver in panel 2 really made me think of Ivan from Oglaf. Not in a bad way, but in the way that he’s weirded out and wary and not entire sure what to do. The body language just says, “please don’t touch me :<"
Also, Charlie <3! And the spots!
So I’ve been checking out the comic for a little while now, was pointed here by Dani and Renee. I have to say I’ve been loving the art throughout, so expressive. It really worked well with the non-verbal nature of the first chapter. Also the connections to the actual dive flags are pretty cool. I find myself googleing the list and comparing it to the things in the comic.
All that said I have a little bit of constructive criticism. The last line of this page, the Diver’s first line, is a little too on the nose. I mean the whole rest of the page is implying pretty heavily that the Diver can understand now. Out right saying it feels a little unnecessary.
Anyways, great work on the comic. I look forward to future releases.
No. Bad. Don’t do that. Don’t try to rewrite the story, I hate it when people try to do that Dx
Mister artist person here has graciously supplied us with an intriguing and totally random storyline. Nobody knows where it’s going! Except him, presumably… he’s the one steering this ship. We can’t be all “HEY MAN LOOK OUT FOR THAT ICEBERG.” If he runs into an iceberg, it was on purpose, and part of the ride! And we’ll understand why later xD We’ll be like “OH. We ran into the iceberg in order to dive down through a secret whirlpool tunnel into the underwater cavern of doom!”
And I mean really, if the artist took your words into consideration and went back, and rewrote the dialogue for you, what would that tell us? That he doesn’t know what he’s doing? That he’s not sure where the story’s going either, so he’ll need criticism from the audience to point him in the right direction? That would be disappointing, personally… x.X
/end random rant
AND, it’s indicative of his mental state, that of shock.
All this mezmerising body hair is excellent. Also, the facial expressions are all totally spot-on. <3
Ah ha i knew it the colours are differnt aspects of his mentality ive often loved the idea that some one whos in a coma or has gone made is in a world where they have to put themnselves to together again
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